My Week of Editing

An extract from the editing this week,  from Folio 55: 4659, currently at 59% complete.

 

“Red has direct line of  sight.” Oracle’s never raised voice is in stark contrast to the carnage behind us.

“I can see him.” I confirm the statement. Even as the words leave my mouth, I watch dumbstruck as the projection turns and zigzags towards us, two separate strands from a common root at the base of the tower. They thrust forward, their advances an etch-a-sketch nightmare: on my right, from pedestrian to pedestrian; on my left, from driver to driver in the opposite lane. Catching up with us; passing us.

From the pavement a mid-twenties lover lets go of his girlfriend’s hand for the last time and throws himself in front of our bumper; from the road a small red postal van slams on its brakes and screeches across the tarmac towards our course.

Seraph pulls left to avoid the vehicle but can do nothing about the boyfriend; his body is a thudding blur in front and then a crunched obstacle that rolls free of our behind, its passenger seat now empty.

 

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If you have enjoyed this excerpt then start the journey at the beginning, with End of a Girl, book 1 in the Folio 55 series. Click here to buy it on Amazon.

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My Week of Editing

An extract from the editing this week,  from Folio 55: 4659, currently at 58% complete.


 

I open my eyes and am rather surprised to see a curly blonde head staring up at me, the face slightly annoyed. It is Siân Gearing and I appear to have carried her into the land of the dead; except staring past her, the land of the dead is offering nothing but mockery to the centuries of artists who have attempted to capture its essence in song and on paper.

Short on fire, demons, boatmen, and turgid rivers it offers only disappointment in the form of a view from the front of a pretty standard double decker bus, looking out through the big front window at a crowd of people on the outside who seem very keen on looking back within.

Behind me – yes there is a behind – the host tunes itself in to whatever broadcast is being transmitted across Hades upon Low, pulling distinct words and phrases from out of the dearly departed fuzz.

“No way!”

“Impossible!”

“So cool!”

“She saved the girl!”

“Where are her feet?”

The last one shocks me a bit and I fear for a sudden roar of agony as recently separated mind paints a picture: bus hits body; feet are severed; body falls back into window, window cracks then shatters; body flies through opening where window used to be; little girl in yellow dress is saved; bigger girl will never score winning goal for England or dance at her own wedding.

 

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If you have enjoyed this excerpt then start the journey at the beginning, with End of a Girl, book 1 in the Folio 55 series. Click here to buy it on Amazon.

My Week of Editing

An extract from the editing this week,  from Folio 55: 4659, currently at 58% complete.


 

 

As I focus on the names, so they light up, become people, and I have passed down a thick thread to the mother. Again, knowledge thrashes my perception, a deluge of sensation with a very different personality: less light, more rigid, stiffer somehow, and scratchy. This is Maya Gearing; she is twenty nine and has a heavy weight lying across her waking hours, a burden that follows her into sleep. She has not slept well for three days now; she suspects that her husband, Charles, is having an affair.

She has no direct proof but there are too many excuses being made to account for late nights at the office, absences during lunch, and a sudden interest in jogging. This shopping trip and a family meal out were supposed to be a way of putting the last few days behind them but why had he gone to the toilet and then been discovered fifteen minutes later in the poetry section? He has always derided anything to do with emotive prose.

Strong thoughts of the husband take hold of my form and throw me across a thick fibrous mat of threads to the man himself: Charles Gearing. For the third time I am being forcibly submerged within all that can be known of a person, a deep, numbing descent into an innocent and unguarded memory archive.

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My Week of Editing

An extract from the editing this week,  from Folio 55: 4659, currently at 56% complete.


 

“Greetings and hello boys with welcome to you girl,” Hannah’s announcement has the same cheery disposition as someone delivering a pizza. “No need as sure for your weapons to point.” With an adroit step around the now definitely sweating large man, a move I quickly emulate, she reaches out with her spare hand, lifts his lapel, and returns the gun to its holster.

“No rigid feelings for you and my apology,” she smiles at him before turning to address another dangerous looking man in an equally as expensive suit; he does not have a weapon drawn. “Please to tell tell sister Ki that a reunion of sorts plus new is to be required with heart.”

“Move and you die,” is his emotionless answer as he considers us. “Who are you and why are you here?”

Has there not recently been a gifting of information such as this?” she mindcomms; if I was looking at her face I’m sure I’d see confusion and the first spark of annoyance.

“Suggestion: that volume be reduced somewhat and more to remove seemingly needed repetition.” There is a delayed sigh when she realises that her request is not going to be acted upon. “Brother Jason plus one has need of communication in person of Ki. Arrange it so and with thanks.” A pause ensues as the man attempts to decrypt her words.

“I have no details about two guests for her.” He raises his arm. “If you would come this way I’m sure we can sort it out.” His outstretched arm points to the right.

“Fifteen metres beyond and Ki awaits. Meeting to be will occur in the there and now.” Hannah’s outstretched arm points straight ahead.

“But I insist.” He nods almost imperceptibly to those surrounding us.

What’s the phrase: a Mexican standoff? Except I have sparred with Hannah too many times. My stomach falls towards my toes as a sense of her next action passes through my head and I prepare myself for a supporting role; with all the weapons in evidence I hope it won’t be my last.

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If you have enjoyed this excerpt then start the journey at the beginning, with End of a Girl, book 1 in the Folio 55 series. Click here to buy it on Amazon.

Review: A Deepness in the Sky by Vernor Vinge

My second outing  with this author and one that I really enjoyed.

Written in the same universe as his first book but linked only by a single character, this is a wonderful character driven novel. The science element of it is interesting but plays second fiddle to the development of the three protagonist cultures. Characters are built up and stand within their own very strong personalities; these personalities then flow through the various plans and overall story to create a highly engaging and enjoyable work.

Ironically have read Adrian Tchaikovsky’s novel “Children of Time”, which is about Spiders, I then read Vinge’s first book about dogs, this book – his second “A Fire upon the Deep” – about Spiders, and now I’ve returned to a second Tchaikovksy book “The Dogs of War”! I’m going to have to read something about humans soon 😉

My only regret is that his third book, which follows his first, only seems to be available as an out of print paper copy – booooo!!!

Highly recommended.

 

Fleecy Moss, author of the Folio 55 series (writing as Nia Sinjorina), End of a Girl & Undon now available on Amazon.